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Mel Páez's avatar

While reading I could clearly see the contrast of red on white. Even the truck was red. I froze in the beginning and then felt the warmth inside the truck. Well done!

Andrew Wilson's avatar

Don't apologize! I think this is great. It's very impressive to me that it just fell out of you, though that's how it often goes with good stuff. The parallelism of the declarations is wonderful, and the writing itself, the evocations of the atmosphere, are wonderful. It reminded me of a scene from The Magic Mountain where Hans is wandering in a blizzard and gets down to some existential matters. This had the same feel of isolation and existential disorientation, for me. Have a nice trip!

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