While reading I could clearly see the contrast of red on white. Even the truck was red. I froze in the beginning and then felt the warmth inside the truck. Well done!
Don't apologize! I think this is great. It's very impressive to me that it just fell out of you, though that's how it often goes with good stuff. The parallelism of the declarations is wonderful, and the writing itself, the evocations of the atmosphere, are wonderful. It reminded me of a scene from The Magic Mountain where Hans is wandering in a blizzard and gets down to some existential matters. This had the same feel of isolation and existential disorientation, for me. Have a nice trip!
The armchair psychologist in me thinks that perhaps on the solo walk you took that inspired this story—being in a strange and isolated setting stoked fear for your safety, however deep-seated. What a thriller!
While reading I could clearly see the contrast of red on white. Even the truck was red. I froze in the beginning and then felt the warmth inside the truck. Well done!
Thank you!! It's always a fantastic feeling to hear this from readers. Cheers! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Don't apologize! I think this is great. It's very impressive to me that it just fell out of you, though that's how it often goes with good stuff. The parallelism of the declarations is wonderful, and the writing itself, the evocations of the atmosphere, are wonderful. It reminded me of a scene from The Magic Mountain where Hans is wandering in a blizzard and gets down to some existential matters. This had the same feel of isolation and existential disorientation, for me. Have a nice trip!
Wow: Now THAT is a compliment! Thank you so much!!
The armchair psychologist in me thinks that perhaps on the solo walk you took that inspired this story—being in a strange and isolated setting stoked fear for your safety, however deep-seated. What a thriller!